tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post6049623981506543410..comments2023-08-23T16:05:42.047-04:00Comments on BLACK MAMBA: HollowFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-47795504657019888162019-01-20T10:33:59.477-05:002019-01-20T10:33:59.477-05:00Wow! Even giving up the tongue, well. That is some...Wow! Even giving up the tongue, well. That is something. I feel like I have this kind of factory inside me too.Marianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04030161532713347225noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-6422302768694642172019-01-15T15:22:19.098-05:002019-01-15T15:22:19.098-05:00I love reading your poems Shay. They make me feel ...I love reading your poems Shay. They make me feel like I've just landed in Never-land! :)....with alternate honeymoons...sighVivian Zemshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09588008375525403964noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-30566636540610562192019-01-13T15:51:16.164-05:002019-01-13T15:51:16.164-05:00damn. the end of that 4th stanza ~damn. the end of that 4th stanza ~grapelinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14929030339206629628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-91141692770836182632019-01-13T13:56:22.583-05:002019-01-13T13:56:22.583-05:00“I was a waitress once” is my favorite line ... I ...“I was a waitress once” is my favorite line ... I feel the Jersey shore in this and Bruce! (do not expect you to read mine as title is dead giveaway)Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-56198468435622967892019-01-13T13:42:36.386-05:002019-01-13T13:42:36.386-05:00Ooh, I love this kind of a poetic banter, a confli...Ooh, I love this kind of a poetic banter, a conflict which at the end of it is humorous, but not necessarily funny. I love the entire lawyer routine and of course the closed factory. A very interesting verse. Also, I absolutely loved the Patti Smith accompaniment!Anmol (HA)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02427056865589377093noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-57630493989017543322019-01-13T12:00:36.856-05:002019-01-13T12:00:36.856-05:00I love this! I love the closed smile factory and t...I love this! I love the closed smile factory and the alternative honeymoon bookstore, but I hope you don't curb your tongue, or you pen!Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-90330409651133511362019-01-13T02:27:50.905-05:002019-01-13T02:27:50.905-05:00As I was reading your poem I thought of Pattii Smi...As I was reading your poem I thought of Pattii Smith, Shay, so I wasn’t surprised to see your music choice. She’s a big favourite of mine, music and poetry. The lines with the closed factory where smiles pile up really got to me and the ‘secret blue clarinet hidden in a cloak’.Kim M. Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16668459794787447606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-90881661013648083272019-01-13T01:24:54.961-05:002019-01-13T01:24:54.961-05:00You have combined so many disparate images into on...You have combined so many disparate images into one amazing whole love poem. I enjoy every non sequitor, each leads to a new angle on a perennial and favourite theme.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-17992226423948244012019-01-12T21:53:10.127-05:002019-01-12T21:53:10.127-05:00I especially love the blue clarinet!I especially love the blue clarinet!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-64414900007450927182019-01-12T21:40:10.954-05:002019-01-12T21:40:10.954-05:00On my very first reading, my just waking-up-eyes g...On my very first reading, my just waking-up-eyes gave to me - "a pushy MATTRESS" .... <br />yup --- blink blink blink - which then sent me howling in absolutely mad laughter, because a pushy mistress is entirely interchangeable with a pushy mattress, or inflatable. But enough of my urchin yowling - <br /><br />I understand you had a bit of help to get the word mojo flowing ... and whatever gets you through the night,... <br />kick-start that Harley Mama, and ride on - 'cos this just is a delight to imagine, read and let the mind savour; all the delicious concrete images and all the hollow spaces we allow for as the details are left to us ... these poem-stories are fascinating and high octane. <br /><br />now this is rocking it ... WildChild47https://www.blogger.com/profile/05903357601592060653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-18549625298282952242019-01-12T20:46:35.326-05:002019-01-12T20:46:35.326-05:00A packed, wonderful first stanza... sets the scene...A packed, wonderful first stanza... sets the scene to this story poem that leaves us asking questions and wanting more - as many of yours are mini novels! Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-19951350336073892602019-01-12T20:40:06.550-05:002019-01-12T20:40:06.550-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-33549613614819400342019-01-12T20:38:46.048-05:002019-01-12T20:38:46.048-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-27777445271886735362019-01-12T20:23:52.869-05:002019-01-12T20:23:52.869-05:00Love that closed factory where the smiles pile up....Love that closed factory where the smiles pile up. Mine was full of tears, before i started leaking. Now i cant stop. Love the waitress lines. Fantastic, as only you can write.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-429757923278327762019-01-12T16:37:59.698-05:002019-01-12T16:37:59.698-05:00Wow. Alternate honeymoons and exwaitress. I love ...Wow. Alternate honeymoons and exwaitress. I love this fren. I truly do. Sounds like the Fireblossom of yesterday. give me a dollar and I'll drive you to the river. Anytime.tonispencerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04200564195675794747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-85455771647591673102019-01-12T16:04:25.555-05:002019-01-12T16:04:25.555-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2469507370783120374.post-71454935940058714582019-01-12T15:28:20.597-05:002019-01-12T15:28:20.597-05:00Spank me with a willow switch of thundered roads, ...Spank me with a willow switch of thundered roads, every one of 'em hollow as bone.Brendanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03983584155125369291noreply@blogger.com